My Immortal - With Commentary by Yours Truly!
Yep, I'm bored, and I came across my Immortal again, so I thought, why not? =P
There have been a few other people on here who've done commentaries, and they were quite amusing, so I thought I'd give it a shot too. X)
This is some messed up fanfiction written by the infamous, Tara Gilesbie. Perhaps one of the best trolls of all time, that, or she had absolutely no idea how the HP series went! XD
My commentary is all the bolded words.
Read for the lulz and enjoy!
XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX666XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX Hmm... it seems the devil came to visit on this chapter.
The next day I woke up in my bedroom as opposed to an alleyway somewhere, or a boot of a car. It was snowing and raining again twice in a row?! Call the weather news people, they'll wanna see this!. I opened the door of my coffin and drank some blood from a bottle I had so you were clutching onto this bottle while you were sleeping?. My coffin was black ebony again, ebony is already black and inside it was hot pink velvet with black lace on the ends let me guess, you got it from Hop Topic?. I got out of my coffin and took of my giant MCR t-shirt which I used for pajamas. Instead, I put on a black leather dress, a pentagram necklace, combat boots and black fishnets on well, at least this outfit is a slight improvement on yesterdays. I put on four pairs of earrings in my pierced ears as opposed to supergluing them on, and put my hair in a kind of messy bun.
My friend, Willow (AN: Raven dis is u!) woke up then and grinned at me what, was she sleeping on the floor or something?. She flipped her long waist-length raven black hair with pink streaks and opened her forest-green eyes so she was grinning at you with her eyes closed? Wow, she must have echo location or something. She put on her Marilyn Manson t-shirt with a black mini, fishnets and pointy high-heeled boots I see you two share the same dress sense. We put on our makeup (black lipstick white foundation and black eyeliner and now you are the ultimate example of goff!)
â€œOMFG, I saw you talking to Draco Malfoy yesterday!â€ she said excitedly. IKR?! So amazing.
â€œYeah? So?â€ I said, blushing. Awww you like him. :3
â€œDo you like Draco?â€ she asked as we went out of the Slytherin common room and into the Great Hall. I like this Willow, she catches on quick.
â€œNo I so fÃ¹cking donâ€™t!â€ I shouted. Wow, talk about a change of heart, though you gotta admit, you were blushing, that usually means you like the person.
â€œYeah right!â€ she exclaimed. see? Even Willow agrees with me Just then, Draco walked up to me. Right on que.
â€œHi.â€ he said.
â€œHi.â€ I replied flirtily. I thought you didn't like him? Now you're flirting with him? Also, I don't think "flirtily" is a word.
â€œGuess what.â€ he said.
â€œWhat?â€ I asked.
â€œWell, Good Charlotte are having a concert in Hogsmeade.â€ he told me. Cos Good Charlotte know allllllll about Hogwarts and its grounds, they go there on their tours each year, didn't you know?
â€œOh. My. FÃ¹cking. God!â€ I screamed. Hell yeah if you should scream, they shouldn't even know about Hogsmeade! I love GC. They are my favorite band, besides MCR. Just to clarify, you know.
â€œWellâ€¦. do you want to go with me?â€ he asked.
I gasped. Cos it was that dramatic.