Can you guys give me your opinion on this poem I wrote?

Can you guys give me your opinion on this poem I wrote?

Chapter 1

Poem

So this is a poem I wrote a few days ago and I'd like your opinion on it. Is it good? Is it bad? Does it have rhythm. Does it make sense?

© 2012 Asilem

A Debt is Repaid

The dark is good, the dark is great
It keeps me blind from my fate
In a corner I sit and cower
Waiting for the Thirteenth Hour
He comes to me and settles near
He leans in close and smells my fear
I feel his breath upon my face
Desprate for some heavenly grace
I grit my teeth and shut my eyes
Preparing for my hard demise
He takes his hand and grabs my soul
There he leaves and empty hole
My heartbeat stops and I start to fade
My debt is now repaid

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