what I am about to say is only, and I repeat ONLY, meant to be constructive critisiscim.
Your character does not develop, and immeadiatly meets a guy we know nothing about and they develop feelings for each other. We are not iven any description of said gu, except that he is "cute".
its good, and on par with most quibblo stuff, but thats kind of setting hte bar a bit low...
feel free to hate.
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